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IBMC #08 Humpty Dumpty went to the mall and started a brawl

My chosen nursery rhyme for this challenge is Humpty Dumpty, a traditional English nursery rhyme, first published in 1803, about an egg which was apparently smashed to pieces. The rhyme is already 200+ years old and still very popular!

The original
Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall. [8]
Humpty Dumpty had a great fall. [8]
All the King’s horses and all the King’s men [10]
Could not put Humpty together again. [10]

My version
Humpty Dumpty went to the mall. [8]
Humpty Dumpty started a brawl. [8]
All the King’s courts and all the King’s judges. [10]
Got angry with Humpty’s lies and fudges. [10]

Humpty Dumpty walked a fine line. [8]
Humpty Dumpty paid a huge fine. [8]
All the King’s knights and all the King’s spies [10]
Will be watching Humpty until he dies. [10]

I tried to keep to the rhythm of the rhyme by using the same number of syllables [indicated in square brackets] as the original version. I thought at first that my “re-modeled” nursery rhyme turned out a little gruesome, but then I realised that poor Humpty literally went to pieces in the original version. This time, at least he gets to live a fairly normal lifestyle, right in keeping with present-day standards.

I hope you will like it.

IBMC #08: The Nursery Rhyme Challenge


I am taking part in the Incredible Blogger Marathon Challenge (IBMC). Prakash Hegade is the event organiser. The IBMC is a series of ten diverse tasks, set to prove the versatility of the participants. Read all my responses to this series here.

{For the 8th challenge in this series] – You are going to enjoy this. You will pick a nursery rhyme and make a new interpretation of it. You are free to make edits to that rhyme and then give an interpretation. The only ultimate restriction is that there has to be rhyme and a new context to it. Let your imaginations flow.

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17 Comments

  1. Haha, excellent. A modern Humpty Dumpty, visiting the busy mall!
    Dis rerig uniek hoor, I like it!

    • HesterLeyNel

      Dankie 😄 Ek het nooi geweet daar is so baie Engelse kinderrympies totdat ek begin soek het na een nie. Op die ou einde het ek besluit om maar een van die ou bekendes te gebruik.

  2. You have done a wonderful job!

    • HesterLeyNel

      Poor Humpty! Haha, thank you Anne.

  3. Wow, that’s a pretty modern version. I do like it.

  4. Welgedaan Hester 😊

  5. Goed gedoen, genade Hester!!! Jy verras my daagliks meer en meer.

    • HesterLeyNel

      Dankie Una, hierdie een was nogal pret.

  6. Well done!

  7. wow! The new version is a treat to read. The syllable counts are maintained the same and yay! This was fun. 🙂

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